tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8832410260230794314.post3557888179829970894..comments2023-05-22T04:57:22.141-05:00Comments on Homeschooled Authors: Deep Character Point-of-View – Part 1 by Jaye L. KnightSarah Holmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11904631370384156831noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8832410260230794314.post-20057731962144392202014-07-11T09:12:06.393-05:002014-07-11T09:12:06.393-05:00Glad I could be helpful. :) That's a good ques...Glad I could be helpful. :) That's a good question. Yes, I do try to eliminate "to be" verbs as much as possible when I'm fine tuning my an manuscript. Although, I'm not strict about destroying every single one of them. Sometimes I like the flow of the sentence better with telling or to be verbs. You kind of have to weigh your options sometimes.<br /><br />As for the example, it could be rewritten, "Jason stared at the vase. Oh, he would really get it now. Mother would be furious." The second sentence still has "be" in it, but, in this instance, I would leave it. Hope that answers your question. :) Jaye L. Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08324555425290092610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8832410260230794314.post-59534914601066433502014-07-11T09:02:39.858-05:002014-07-11T09:02:39.858-05:00I'm so glad. ^_^ Sometimes I don't feel li...I'm so glad. ^_^ Sometimes I don't feel like I'm very good at explaining things. :PJaye L. Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08324555425290092610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8832410260230794314.post-11192187787065608692014-07-09T20:24:58.615-05:002014-07-09T20:24:58.615-05:00Thank you for this article; it was very helpful, e...Thank you for this article; it was very helpful, especially the bit about thoughts. I'm definitely making a note of that for when I'm editing later this year. I noticed in that part about the vase that you used the word "was"... This question is a little bit off topic, but since you were talking about eliminating telling words, I wondered what you think about to be verbs, "was" in particular. I know that some people think you should take it out altogether. What do you think about that? Athelashttp://craftingstoriesinred.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8832410260230794314.post-77167942444029488332014-07-08T17:22:50.391-05:002014-07-08T17:22:50.391-05:00Thank you for sharing, Jaye! I know you told me s...Thank you for sharing, Jaye! I know you told me some of this with my book, but hearing (reading) it here made it clearer to me.Faith Blumhttp://faithblum.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com